An Unexpected Adventure
I stepped off the train at the Stazione Santa Maria Novella of
We proceeded to the glass windows of the baggage checkroom, eager to speak to the man. He opened one of the windows with a “Dimmi” and I asked, “Are there any trains going from
He replied, “Not from this station. But there is another in
“The trains run throughout the night?” I asked, skeptical about whether he was telling the truth.
“Sí, sí,” he said, “They always run throughout the night.”
With a “Grazie” we left the baggage check and found a taxi that would take us to the Campo di Marte, and even though it was five euro per person, we decided it was worth the money with our cumbersome and heavy luggage. I confirmed with the taxi driver that the trains ran at night to
“Do you guys have your permessos?” I whispered quietly, only to have several people shake their heads with a no. Worried about whether we would be arrested, we waited as they finished talking to whomever they reported to, and eventually they gave us back our passports. When it was clear that we were not going to be thrown into jail, Ryan asked, “Do you know when the train to
One of the officers replied, “Yes, I think it leaves in five minutes. Hold on a moment.” Suddenly, he yelled across the platform to the conductor outside the parked train in rapid Italian, and the man answered back incomprehensibly. The officer turned to us, “Yes, it is that train right there. It is leaving now. Run to platform seven!” Without any hesitation, we all picked up our luggage and sprinted to platform seven, approached another conductor, and asked, “Vai a Roma?”
“No,” she said, “Non vado a Roma.”
“What?!” exclaimed Laura, “What is she talking about?”
“You’ve got to be kidding me,” I said. “When does the next train leave for
“Next train is not until 5:30 a.m. I do not know why they don’t run,” she replied, “Sorry.”
In complete dismay, we sat down to discuss what we should do as the train rode away. After much debate, we decided that, rather than spend money on a hotel that would probably not check us in this late (by this time it was already past midnight), we would return to the Stazione Santa Maria Novella, where the trains are faster, check our luggage again, and go out all night in Florence. After all, we might as well take advantage of being in
After waiting fifteen minutes for a taxi, we caught one that took us to Santa Maria Novella—another five euro. We entered the train station for the third time that day, and when we thought that it couldn’t get any worse, we saw that the baggage check was closed. At that point, we had no choice. A hotel it was. We wandered around the streets near the train station, looking for a place we could regroup, and were utterly rejoiced to find the golden arches of McDonald’s. At least here was a place that was open, had food, was warm, and had a place where we could sit.
Several of us ordered some burgers and fries while Ryan, being the only man in the group, decided to go searching for a hotel that was affordable and would allow us to check in this late. After about fifteen minutes, he returned to tell us that he had found a hotel that had three doubles for twenty-two euro per person, and that even though he had to wake up the owner, he was willing to take us in for the night. We immediately took advantage of the opportunity and gave our passports to Ryan so that he could check us in and get our room keys. After finishing our American meals, we made our way to our hotel rooms where there were warm beds awaiting us. The next morning, we finally returned to
4 comments:
The true story as it happened, told in skilful manner. Funny how you are commenting on my fable and me on yours and yet they are both so different, I took a fictional route and you told the real story. It was a suitable choice for our experience kept getting worse and worse as it progressed until the fateful resolution. Good job on conciseness and word choice. I enjoyed reading this from your perspective.
~Veneta
It’s hard for me not to love this story, considering I went through it with you! But I did really like your retelling of it, especially your use of dialogue. You placed it really well throughout the story – it broke up the descriptions so the piece wasn’t monotonous, and I really liked how you used Italian words and phrases (i.e., dimmi, vai a Roma) because that’s how it really happened and these words give the piece a genuine feel.
There wasn’t much I would critique about the story. One thing that I might change was the name of the Florence train station right at the beginning. The train station name is so long and I stumbled over it a bit so maybe reorganizing it would help, like Florence’s Stazione Santa Maria Novella, or something along those lines. Even that is still easy to trip over, though. Another sentence like that is the one where you said “At least here was a place that was open, had food, was warm, and had a place where we could sit” – to make it flow a little better it might work to say something more like “At least here was an open, warm place with food and a place to sit.” It wouldn’t have to be exactly like that of course, but condensing it a little more would help the sentence be more fluid. Those are my only real critiques though, Katie – your writing style is very clear and shows a consciousness of how the piece comes off to the reader.
Katie,
I thought this was a great story, I still can't believe it actually happened! I think you do a great retelling of the events and the story was really engaging to read. Great job!
I loved your story Katie, I still can't believe that really happened to all of you! What an adventure. Great job at following the guidelines and keeping your reader following attently along with the story. You describe everything so well and it seems as though the audience can picture themselves in the exact same situation. Great job.
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